Corectare a unui text in engleza.

[Dav1d]

Am avut ca tema pentru o revista de facut o poezie care sa contina cuvintele Wish , Spring , Dream. Am facut ceva , dar nu stiu daca este corect din punct de vedere gramatical. As vrea daca se poate ca cineva sa imi corecteze. Si daca se poate sa lasati si voi o parere.

I wish I could be a star
On the night sky to glow
Seeing all thats far
And knowing why its snow

On the first spring night
Understanding why you can't
To forgot our fight
Even to sleep I can't

I wish I could be a bird
On the day sky to fly
Seeing all thats weird
And knowing why you cry

On the first summer day
Understanding why you can't
Give back my heart key
Even to dream I can't

I wish I could be the sun
To warm you on Autumn day(s)
Understanding why you run
Leave me to go on the wrong ways

I wish i could be someone else
Healing back your heart
Never talkin' just non-sense
Beeing once again as at the start

[Stell Rock]

Am avut ca tema pentru o revista de facut o poezie care sa contina cuvintele Wish , Spring , Dream. Am facut ceva , dar nu stiu daca este corect din punct de vedere gramatical. As vrea daca se poate ca cineva sa imi corecteze. Si daca se poate sa lasati si voi o parere.

I wish I could be a star
On the night sky to glow
Seeing all that's far
And knowing why it's snow

On the first spring night
Understanding why you can't
To forgot our fight
Even to sleep I can't

I wish I could be a bird
On the day sky to fly
Seeing all thats weird
And knowing why you cry

On the first summer day
Understanding why you can't
Give back my heart key
Even to dream I can't

I wish I could be the sun
To warm you on Autumn day(s)
Understanding why you run
Leave me to go on the wrong ways

I wish i could be someone else
Healing back your heart
Never talkin' just non-sense
Beeing once again as at the start

Din punct de vedere gramatical este corect .. desi am citit textul de 3 ori
Ai grija .. sa pui " ' " la cuvinte .. [don't , let's ... etc etc]

Cat despre poezie, cat de cat ok :D